Cheng-Min Peng, a baseball player. You may be wondering that there are so many people playing baseball, then why is he so special? You don’t need to be a baseball fan, if you’ve ever concerned about baseball in/of Taiwan, it may be impossible for you to not knowing who he is. Cheng-Min Peng, also called Cha-cha as his nickname, may be thought as one of the greatest baseball players in Taiwan.
Cheng-Min Peng is not famous for his appealing appearance. In fact, he is not handsome at all, with a pair of small eyes which has become his personal feature. Along with a friendly smile, the cute little eyes have thought to be the most charming part of him. Cha-cha has started playing baseball since he was in elementary school. And then, he never stops it. He kept winning a lot of games and awards in different ages. Until now, he is playing in the Chinese Professional Baseball League (CPBL), and play for the Brother Elephant team. He is not only an outstanding player as usual; he is also the most representative player of his team as well as the whole league. Cha-cha has set up a lot of difficult record due to his awesome skills and performance. Moreover, he has kept winning the highest votes by fans in the annual all-star game of CPBL.
Except for CPBL, he is one of the most indispensible players of Chinese Taipei team. In the important international games such as Olympics or World Baseball Classic, he is always the first person to be invited. Cha-cha is like a hope of Taiwanese people, when you see him standing on the field, it is like we are going to win the game. Although he is not in a good health condition, he still does his best to win the game without any concern; although the team has fall behind, he never gives up but tries hard to encourage his teammates. In history, he has made a lot of glory for Taiwan, and brought us a lot of victory and happiness. And he is sure to keep playing this important role in the future. He is one of the heroes of baseball in Taiwan.
It is no doubt that how a great player he is, and how he has meant to the whole country. However, these are only part of the reason that made him somebody. Although he already has such great performance and reputation, he is very humble. He never stops improving himself so that he won’t let people supporting him down. Cha-cha behaves himself well and is very polite to everyone. Whenever he hits a homerun, he never raises his hands or yells out or other action like these which he thinks is impolite to the pitcher. I think a really great athletic is consisting of not only the outer skill, but also the well attitude. And he, Cheng-Min Peng, is just a good model among all. That’s why Cheng-Min Peng is the baseball player that I admire most.
姵妤: Your selected writing topic about baseball is quite similar to 柏沂's. You may like to take a look at what he has presented in his description of Wang's Chien-Ming's basketball career and competition history in the US. You two both pointed out the sportsmanship that successful players should possess. Lovely! Showing my respect, I salute their persistence and accomplishment.
回覆刪除In general, your essay provides lots of details regarding Peng's brilliant records. It's very informative and interesting in a way. Along with that, I would like to encourage you to apply more descriptive techniques of "showing" in portraying Peng's performance on the battlefield. To imprint a more vivid figure of Peng, you mat try to incorporate more action words that can activate readers' five senses. The use of examples driven by the dominant impressions will help as well. Overall, a good writing piece of draft (2) for sure.
For the language use, some sentences may need small correction.
Until now, he is playing in the Chinese Professional Baseball League (CPBL), and play for the Brother Elephant team. (tense check)
(1) Cha-cha has set up a lot of difficult record.....(noun phrase check)
(2) Although he is not in a good health condition, he still does his best to win the game without any concern; although the team has fall behind, he never gives up but tries hard to encourage his teammates. (break down the sentences)
(3)....is consisting of not only the outer skill, but also the well attitude. (modifier check)